Blog #8

I revised this quote based on my peers edits. They stated I need to explain the quote more and that is exactly what I did. Before I simply had the quote and wrapped up the idea. After revising I had the quote and then an explanation before wrapping up the idea.

Before:  During his TED Talk Kaphar states, “I want to make sculptures that are honest, that wrestle with the struggles of our past but speak to the diversity and the advances of our present” (Kaphar, Titus).

After the quote I added: Kaphar gave an example of how exactly he would like to do this. He wants to put new socially updated sculptures next to socially outdated historical ones. 

After reviewing edits and notes on the free draft I handed in I decided to see if I could work my claim about art being everywhere into a response to the EAs view. One member is quoted saying “‘By definition, most artists are mediocre, and their art doesn’t Rea;;y please many people, if any” (Southern 440). I am going to use this in that paragraph because I discuss ads and if ads were not pleasing to people products would not be sold and that clearly is not the case because people are constantly shopping.

Another quote I am going to include in my final draft that I did not include in my free draft is a quote about Peter Singer’s shallow-pond analogy. The quote is, “Suppose you saw a child drowning in a pond: would you jump in and rescue her even if you hadn’t pushed her in… and yet most of us manage to ignore those dying of poverty and preventable disease all over the world, though we could easily hep them” (Southan 435). I was originally going to add this to my conclusion. However, as I look at the quote more and rework my paper further I think I might add the quote earlier in the paper and discuss how the two actions are not comparable, much like art is not comparable.