As I revise my first paper, my main goal is to reorganize the paragraphs and structure slightly to include more of my own thoughts as well as to help strengthen my argument with the new arrangement.
First I am going to look back at my outline for the paper in order to see where I marked my own thoughts on my views of the importance of art. Next I am going to go through and read all of the edits my peers made. Then I am going to print a new copy of my free draft. I am going to go through this new copy and combine my peers edits onto one copy in order to be able to clearly see all the edits put together. This will help me be able to efficiently edit my paper to strengthen my argument . I am going to pay extra attention to the organizational edits and move paragraphs or ideas around as suggested to make the paper stronger and all the points really click.
Next I will go back and read the first sentence of every paragraph and make sure that they are claims not summaries. These firsts sentences are where I can add more of my opinion in order to make the sentence a claim and not a summary. After addressing these sentences I will then reread each paragraphs concluding sentence to make sure the transitions between the newly organized paragraphs works nicely to help the paper flow easily.
My biggest challenge I see is making sure the balance between my words and the claims I am making is right. I do not want to much of my own voice that it drowns out the importance or argument of this paper. However, I also do not want the paper to be a bunch of facts that has no claims because a paper full of just facts is not interesting and does not capture the readers attention, nor does it hold the readers attention.
If this challenge or any other challenge comes up that I feel is too difficult for me to solve on my own I will first ask for a peers help or advice on how to solve the issue. If this does not work the way I intend I will reach out to my professor and ask for assistance in solving the problem. Another resource I could use if I wanted is SASC.
You sound like you are off to a wonderful start revising your paper. Your goal is right on. I have to agree with your opinion that the SASC is a resource. I just love that place. 3/3